Week 11 Story: Three Young Women
Three Young Women
One day they were all talking about how much they hated being in a small town. They were the only young ones left. Everyone else was old and did not mind living in a small town.
Beautiful said to the other two, “Let’s leave this place and go to a bigger and better town. We will explore new things and make new friends. We will have an opportunity to live a better life.”
The other two fishes were willing to go to a new city and see what will come of it. They were afraid of being alone in a dangerous city. They even told Beautiful that it might not be safe to go alone there.
Even after warning Beautiful they all decided to go ahead and go to the big city. It was the first day in a new place. They did not know where to start or where they should go first.
They started touring around and just going from one place to the next. All day went by and it was night time. Beautiful, Ugly and Very-Ugly were just walking in town but they realized they could not find their wallet.
They were so scared that they did not know what to do or were to go. They were so lost in a new town. Beautiful thought of an idea. She said she will use her beauty to ask a young man for help. Ugly and Very-Ugly agreed to get help that way.
At this point they were very tired of this new city. All they wanted to do was find their wallet and go back home to their small town. They soon found a handsome young man and he helped them find their wallet.
They were so happy and excited to go back home.
The Three Young Women. Source.
Inspired by The Three Fishes . I used the idea of the 3 characters being named by their looks. Also the characters going to a new place from their old place because they did not like it. Then they go back to their old place after having a bad experience.
Hi Pranali! Overall, I could definitely tell that your story looks amazing; even from just the look of it! It was so creative that you turned the original story to something special of your own from using your imagination. It was also very creative that you named the main characters, “Beautiful, Ugly, and Very-Ugly.” Keep up the great work, Pranali!
ReplyDeleteHey Pranali! I remember reading the original story, and being quite amused by their names – Thoughtful, Very Thoughtful, and Thoughtless. I liked your analog names of Beautiful, Ugly, and Very Ugly in this story. I thought you did a great job of mirroring the original story in your remake, and I look forward to reading more of your stories this semester!
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ReplyDeleteWhat hooked me into your story as I was surfing the blog-stream was the unusual names of your three protagonists.
The two sisters warning Beautiful of the potential dangers of the city is a great tension-builder/source of foreshadowing. About halfway through the story, you refer to the three as fishes and I was briefly confused. Also, what if the person that helped them to find their wallet was a fellow lady? Regardless, this was an interesting take on the jataka! Thanks for sharing!
Hi Pranali! I liked the premise of your story. It was an interesting idea, and their names are also very clever when one remembers the original. I think you could have expanded on their issues a little bit more, dragging it into action and highlighting the conflict a little harder. It is good skeleton of a story, but I would love to see you really bring it to life with more detail!
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